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I dreamt about you
Another time, another
Me, I cannot control
Every tear every laugh

It was you but it was
The wrong time, I don't
Know how, can't control
Every feeling every
Lie

I heard a song I knew you
The waves came I lost
Me, I cannot control
Every tear every laugh

Talk to you, I search
For a song loved and lost
In time, can't forget
Every second that I
Lie

Please keep me close to
What it was as I
Hope I make sense because
I need to see us try...
©2007-2009 ~daimy
:icondaimy:

Author's Comments

i know i always disappear for a while.. and then i always come back.. i hate myself for that :P

maybe it's because i don't know what to upload and if i don't upload things it gets kind of boring.

aaanyway. i guess i'll just assume that i'll be here once in a while.

and as you expected, i hate this poem. and as you probably expected too, do you think the ending doesn't really sound like an ending? cuz i do ._. .

i'm practically begging for help here xD .
okay enough said. critiquee =)

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~Beneath-Me Oct 15, 2008, 5:29:57 PM
Critick jiji.

I do feel the last line like an ending, is almost a conclusion of what has been stated above.


Sab ._.

--
"Reveal to me your mysteries, Witch".
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